Monday, July 30, 2007

Contrast


This week's ODB prompt is "Compare and Contrast"

***

like a flash of light
your image lingers, etched
on my inner eye

***

a sudden sharp pain
didn't know I was lonely
until I met you...

8 comments:

Greggo said...

i LOVE the line 'etched on my inner eye'! beautiful words. :-)

Roswila said...

Oh, yes, that second one hits (really hard and with quite a thump) home. :-)

Tumblewords: said...

The second one caught my breath!

Crafty Green Poet said...

these are very emotionally vivid.

Clare said...

Both of these are great! I like how in each there is a feeling of aloneness that shifts -- like in the first with the image lingering and being etched --and in the second with meeting someone. Really nice.
:)

Sherri B. said...

I'm so glad I discovered your blog -- your poetry is beautiful, and so visually clear. You say so much with so little!

Unknown said...

They are both great, but I was very struck by the second.

Plain Foolish said...

The second is very powerfully done. Thank you.